New Song Draft

Well… the beat (or music) needs work (to be on Mtv) other vise its ok. The text is ok but I would like to say that… you need to put an emotion behind your rapping. You know like when you are a rAFC and you are choring out lines for HBs but they don’t really feel it, and year later with same or even worse material they r giggling all over the place? Thats what I’m talking about. More emotion from where you are coming from, like Eminem is pissed off, niggers are all like cool gangsta shit (better then all the boyfriends ;)… So what is your emotional frame? And don’t say vegan polyphasic sleeper or I’ll bitch slap you :))

My standup class is held by professional actors, best in Croatia and once you see these people talk, emote, they are masters of BL and only then you realize how little I was doing, and how much can be done.It teaches me ALOT about emotions and expressions, taking similar class would improve your game, life and rapping. Try acting or standup class it will expand your life, cos infront of audience you are forced to do your best, not like in front of a microphone at home. (Krunkeoke is good I guess).

I personally like it, I think it’s a great start. The background music seems to treble dependant however. You have a higher octave voice (in a cool way) and personally you need more of a bass track added onto it to compliment that voice. Right now, the only mix is the drum machine beat and a slight keyboard riff.

Also, have ya thought about adding an extra female voice into the mix to sing in the background for a chorus. “Meet tynan, better than my boyfriend, quite trying, no lying, cooler then my best friend…so sly what a guy don’t pretend…he’s better then my boyfriend.”

Just some thoughts dude, do what ya will…

Cheers,
Requiem

Sorry, Tie, I’ve been hella-busy recording my hot new album. But you’ll be happy to hear that I’m finishing up my part our track right now. PopoZao! PopoZao!

I listened to it last night and decided to see what my sister thought. She loved it and wanted to know if you had a cd out (I said prolly not)…. Any who I like it, she liked the beat the best.

Good job

Great song, but the end has to be less needy. Mention the site but not the “email me” part. And then delete this post so no girls read it. :)

Love !Mystery

Hey man, I am rarely envious of people. I consider myself blessed in many aspects, and therefor am quite content with whatever comes my way. But you sir, have jumped to the top of my green list. How can one not envy a man who buys a pool for the sole purpose of housing a penguin (fictious or otherwise). Enough about me though, let’s talk about your song. Unfortuantly I’m not a fan. The concept is great, you clearly know your way around Fruityloops, but lyrically I think you’re being held back. Try not to worry so much about making things rhyme and concentrate on flow. Those are my two cents man. Keep on keepin on. Peace

Awesome song, I think there definately needs to be a video made. Maybe that will help you bring through the emotion.